I've heard rumors they’re going to strike. The B.O. The Black Organization. The F.B.I.’s found a lead that the others are going to strike. Hopefully this time, they're going down. No, they will go down. I’m not letting them slip through my fingers like before. Never again like before.
I'm going to hunt down those bastards and put them in a cell they can't escape! Gin and Vodka are going to get what they deserve. My revenge. My rage.
But, what I’m really hoping for is the antidote. Haibara says she's found it. The final and real antidote. But is she wrong? Mom, Dad, Ran, and everybody else... All of them are waiting for me to come back. And I will come back. As Shinichi Kudou, I will. That's a promise, but what if she's wrong?
She's won't be, and when I'm back, I’ll write my success, as Shinichi Kudou. I Will. Watch out World. Cause here I come.
Third Person:
Shinichi- Much rather Conan, looked at Ran’s face in the dim room, that was lighted by the moonlight, Shinichi looked down on her face.
’Ran, after all the pain and suffering I’ve caused you, you still wait for me.’
Shinichi thought of all the times he’d caused her to cry, mourn, and scream out in anger. Only because he kept breaking his promises. By him always telling her, I’ll be back soon, Ran. You worry too much, Nothing’s happened.
But not what she wanted to hear.
She loved him. She told him herself or Conan really. So, why couldn’t he do the same? Because he was a coward. He’s afraid if he tells her, will be ever actually be Shinichi? Besides, telling her that he’s Conan is out if the question. She’ll kill him! And she’ll be in danger. Those bastards would hunt down everyone who knew, or they even suspected that knew the truth, they’d kill. And then what would he live for?
All the lives in danger all because of him. Mom, Dad, Ran, Kogoro, Kisaki, The Detective boys, Agasa, Haibara, Hattori, Hakuba, Even Kid! All of them in danger, even though they didn’t even know…
But after getting Jodie-sensei’s help, they could track them down right? The F.B.I. are closer he ever would’ve been alone.
Then Ran shuffled and turned around, her hand moving until she found Conan’s, and murmured his name over and over, as if in a nightmare. Conan squeezed her hand, and then backed out of the room.
’I’ll be back, Ran. Just wait a little longer and I’ll be back. Soon.’
As the moonlight reflecting off his glasses, he closed the door.
We're sorry, but this application has been rejected. We do not get a clear sense of character voice from your samples; in addition, we would recommend editing your applications more carefully in the future. The many mistakes in your personality section often made it unclear exactly what you were trying to say.
Also, your application was not overlooked; there was never a third person sample posted, so we were waiting until you completed the application to judge it. In the future, do not delete any applications, even if you feel they've been overlooked, without talking to one of us first.
Shinichi Kudou/ 3/3
I've heard rumors they’re going to strike. The B.O. The Black Organization. The F.B.I.’s found a lead that the others are going to strike. Hopefully this time, they're going down. No, they will go down. I’m not letting them slip through my fingers like before. Never again like before.
I'm going to hunt down those bastards and put them in a cell they can't escape! Gin and Vodka are going to get what they deserve. My revenge. My rage.
But, what I’m really hoping for is the antidote. Haibara says she's found it. The final and real antidote. But is she wrong? Mom, Dad, Ran, and everybody else... All of them are waiting for me to come back. And I will come back. As Shinichi Kudou, I will. That's a promise, but what if she's wrong?
She's won't be, and when I'm back, I’ll write my success, as Shinichi Kudou. I Will. Watch out World. Cause here I come.
Third Person:
Shinichi- Much rather Conan, looked at Ran’s face in the dim room, that was lighted by the moonlight, Shinichi looked down on her face.
’Ran, after all the pain and suffering I’ve caused you, you still wait for me.’
Shinichi thought of all the times he’d caused her to cry, mourn, and scream out in anger. Only because he kept breaking his promises. By him always telling her, I’ll be back soon, Ran. You worry too much, Nothing’s happened.
But not what she wanted to hear.
She loved him. She told him herself or Conan really. So, why couldn’t he do the same? Because he was a coward. He’s afraid if he tells her, will be ever actually be Shinichi? Besides, telling her that he’s Conan is out if the question. She’ll kill him! And she’ll be in danger. Those bastards would hunt down everyone who knew, or they even suspected that knew the truth, they’d kill. And then what would he live for?
All the lives in danger all because of him. Mom, Dad, Ran, Kogoro, Kisaki, The Detective boys, Agasa, Haibara, Hattori, Hakuba, Even Kid! All of them in danger, even though they didn’t even know…
But after getting Jodie-sensei’s help, they could track them down right? The F.B.I. are closer he ever would’ve been alone.
Then Ran shuffled and turned around, her hand moving until she found Conan’s, and murmured his name over and over, as if in a nightmare. Conan squeezed her hand, and then backed out of the room.
’I’ll be back, Ran. Just wait a little longer and I’ll be back. Soon.’
As the moonlight reflecting off his glasses, he closed the door.
Rejected
Also, your application was not overlooked; there was never a third person sample posted, so we were waiting until you completed the application to judge it. In the future, do not delete any applications, even if you feel they've been overlooked, without talking to one of us first.