(( I hope it's ok, I just continued the original.))
[A video feed starts, there’s a young boy with black hair looking at the screen.][He walks away.]
What do I care, anyway? It’s not like I would’ve been able to read the stupid thing.
[A sigh can be heard and he walks back in view.]
What was that kid thinking? He could’ve gotten shot, proably killed, and he just stood there, like he was waiting for it to happen...wanting it.
Probably has a death wish, no surprise there, it’s not like life’s a kind creature, but if he thinks I’m just gonna stand aside the next time he pulls something like that...
........this is ridiculous. Why do I care so damn much?
[He scoffs.]
Whatever, maybe I’m just tired, not getting enough sleep at night. I should just go to bed.
[He moves to blow the lamp out but pauses, thinking.]
I wonder if those doll things...maybe if the way they’re run is perfected, maybe that could be the key to having a normal body...maybe.
I’ll leave it for the doc to handle for now, it’s not like I know how to do it, I’ll just go to bed.
[Another pause.]
What if he’s doing something stupid right now, like playing with something sharp to close to his own stupid neck...or messing with the Cardmaster.
Damn it! I’ll just go check on him and then I’ll get some sleep!
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[A video feed starts, there’s a young boy with black hair looking at the screen.][He walks away.]
What do I care, anyway? It’s not like I would’ve been able to read the stupid thing.
[A sigh can be heard and he walks back in view.]
What was that kid thinking? He could’ve gotten shot, proably killed, and he just stood there, like he was waiting for it to happen...wanting it.
Probably has a death wish, no surprise there, it’s not like life’s a kind creature, but if he thinks I’m just gonna stand aside the next time he pulls something like that...
........this is ridiculous.
Why do I care so damn much?
[He scoffs.]
Whatever, maybe I’m just tired, not getting enough sleep at night. I should just go to bed.
[He moves to blow the lamp out but pauses, thinking.]
I wonder if those doll things...maybe if the way they’re run is perfected, maybe that could be the key to having a normal body...maybe.
I’ll leave it for the doc to handle for now, it’s not like I know how to do it, I’ll just go to bed.
[Another pause.]
What if he’s doing something stupid right now, like playing with something sharp to close to his own stupid neck...or messing with the Cardmaster.
Damn it! I’ll just go check on him and then I’ll get some sleep!
[The lights cut out.]
Rejected